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Addition and Extension in English Sentence: the simple short block method

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Addition and Extension in English Sentence: the simple short block method

I always maintain a rule: Don’t extend or expand your sentence too much. A sentence is a vehicle of an image, meaning, emotion, and many more things.

So I try to keep it as short as possible; so that each block carries its own meaning. I try to add those blocks in a decoupled way. The advantage is when one block gets corrupted, the other block does not get affected.

How we could try this technique?

Let me present a list first.

  • Addition and Extension: and.
  • Contrast: but, however.
  • Alternative: or
  • Cause: because
  • Time: when, while.

Let me present a few sentences using complex and compound structures.

A boy, named Rajanya, fell in love with a girl, named Nilopher; they decided to leave their village together after three days, which would be Sunday, a holiday. Nilopher’s cousin Farid knew the whole story because he had been a close friend of Rajanya, in fact, primarily he had acted upon as the mediator between them; although, Farid did not like this relationship from the core of his heart.

I have checked this text in Grammarly, and found this report:

  • This text scores better than 99% of all text checked by Grammarly where comparable goals were set.
  • Your text compares in readability to The New York Times. It is likely to be understood by a reader who has at least a 10th-grade education (age 16).
  • The readability score: 46

It was OK. But, not satisfactory. It has got readability score – 46. Now, I will try to make it, at least, above 60. Let me try.

Let me try to write the same text applying the simple short-block-method.

Rajanya fell in love with Nilopher.
They decided to leave their village together after three days. It would be Sunday, a holiday.
Nilopher’s cousin Farid knew the whole story. Farid had been a close friend of Rajanya. Primarily he had acted upon as the mediator between them.
Although, Farid hated this relationship from the core of his heart.

I checked it on Grammarly. Here is the report:

  • This text scores better than 97% of all text checked by Grammarly where comparable goals were set.
  • Your text is likely to be understood by a reader who has at least an 8th-grade education (age 13-14) and should be fairly easy for most adults to read.
  • The readability score: 64

Now, it is your turn to judge. Which one is better.

Sentence Structure: a few key points

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Extension

Two simultaneous things may take place at the same time.

While something was happening, something happened.

Contrast or Contrary

Good or bad may happen as a result.

Although I knew it was risky, I decided to accept the proposal.

Cause

One thing does or does not allow another thing to take place.

Because I was looking at the sea, I did not her her coming.

Possibility

A real or an imaginary situation where something would have acted upon or not.

If I was having shower, I could not take the call. (Imaginary)

I could take the call, if I had not had the shower. (Real)